Short Story: New Pet

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Posted by: mr_faust Original: 7/5/2009 9:28 PM Views: 57 Comments: 10 eProps: 18 Read Comments Post a Comment Back to Your Xanga Site

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Sunday, July 05, 2009

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The 400 Blows - Criterion Collection
By Jean-Pierre Léaud, Albert Rémy, Claire Maurier, Guy Decomble, Georges Flamant
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I ended up posting this without having a second edit, so please excuse some off wordings. But aside from need for grammatical edits, I'd like some criticism for this tale. Granted its not added into my WEbook project like the former tale (Wonderland)

"This game is too beautiful for words..."

WARNING: some material may not be appropriate for persons 16 or younger (or moralists for the matter)

[One-Shot: New Pet]

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Posted 7/5/2009 9:28 PM - 57 Views - 18 eProps - 10 comments

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:spinning: :coolman: :goodjob:
O M G.
Wow...
Like WOW wow.
That was too good. The puppy part made me cry, though... :(

Posted 7/4/2009 1:28 AM by milubbles - reply

Vengeance devour the one who starts it and its target without mercy. Nice story. Perhaps it is a good lesson for everyone.

Posted 7/4/2009 1:40 AM by Murazrai - reply

:wave:

Posted 7/4/2009 12:23 PM by apyus

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eek. whatever language this is, I don't speak it. but it's a funky toon ))

Posted 7/4/2009 12:28 PM by Loonsounds

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Wow, didn't know you were also an author... Will read your one-shot tonight.

Posted 7/4/2009 12:42 PM by kachino

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@milubbles - much thanks

@Murazrai - err, in some ways from how i've written it :p

@apyus - :wave:

@Loonsounds - Czech

@kachino - err, currently a novice right noaw. just some stuff here and there. also, criticism is welcomed :sunny:

Posted 7/4/2009 1:37 PM by mr_faust - reply

always good at making some seriously disturbing stuff :laugh: :eek:

i say there could be a few scenes to be tweaked, but i think that's what made this story whole (if that makes sense)

Posted 7/4/2009 7:21 PM by SuperSafe68 - reply